This is my freshman’s time, the picture is my birthday. This is
taken by my classmate. My classmates and teachers celebrate it. It was my
unforgettable memory. Because some classmates are not familiar to each other, I
didn’t expect my classmates will celebrate it.
That day, my one classmate skip the last course, buy the cake and
some drinks. He told my friends to give me a surprise, when I go to the English
department’s office, I saw my friends give me two cakes, the candles on the
cake, it’s my 20 years old birthday. And my others friends cheat me to the
roof, they are also give me a surprise. This is my beautiful memory, too. But
to my sophomore, I transfer to Wenzao. I need to suit for the new environment
and this school, sometimes I’m so miss my old classmates and that memory. But I
always told myself I have to learn how to independent for, when I’m so depress
or sad , I will take the picture to forget the bad emotion. Although I seldom
contact with my old friends, I can take the pictures and remember them.
All in all, this picture is important to me, it can bring me some
great memory. And can give me a motivation to work hard, I love that time.
Hello Katie :))
回覆刪除This is a very good photo! You seem very happy in that photo. I am glad you have lots of best friends to celebrate your birthday. That time was memorable and precious!
The friendship between your friends and you are good. Hope we can be that great, too. ;)
回覆刪除http://aeffnkatie1.blogspot.tw/ (Katie)
回覆刪除Please see my corrections in parenthesis ( )
This is my freshman’s time, the picture is my birthday (The picture above was taken on my birthday when I was in my first year of college). This is (It was) taken by my classmate. My classmates and teachers celebrate (celebrated it with me) it. It was my unforgettable memory. B because some (of) classmates are (were) not familiar to (with) each other (don't know each other well), I didn’t expect my classmates will (to) celebrate it (with me).
That day, my one classmate (one of my classmates skipped) skip the last course, buy (bought) the cake and some drinks. He told my friends to give me a surprise (that it was going to be a surprise), when I go (went) to the English department’s office, I saw my friends give (gave) me two cakes, the candles on the cake, it’s my 20 years old birthday (This is unclear. Do you mean- it was your 20th birthday?). And my others friends cheat (cheated) me to the roof (this is also unclear. what do you mean?) , they are also give (gave) me a surprise. This is my beautiful memory, too. But to(during) my sophomore (year), I transfer (transferred) to Wenzao. I need to suit (adjust to the) for the new environment and this school, (;) sometimes I’m so (I) miss my old classmates and that memory. But I always told myself I have to learn how to (be) independent for, when I’m so depress(ed) or sad (.) , I will take (look at) the picture to forget the bad emotion. Although I seldom contact with my old friends, I can take the pictures and remember them.
All in all, this picture is important to me, (;) it can bring me some great memory. And (it) can give me a motivation (motivate me) to work hard (.) , I love that time.
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